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Mare: Kindred of the Coldest Step Written and Created by Vember Judgement Issue 2: Cuts ------------- (Start of Issue 2 takes place at the Hiung Ultra Mart, a semi-popular albeit slightly run-down roadside grocery at the edge of town.) Pg1 Panel 1: A full area shot of Bianca laying on her side behind the grocery, curled up in a child-like fetal position. Shadows of Mares are all about her, thought she doesn’t see them. The reader also only sees shadows. Panel 2: A facial shot of Bianca, sweating from the run. Her eyes are half-closed as she is drifting off to sleep. Bianca: ... Pg2 (Next dream scenes will be in complete Sepia tone. It's to signify the horror in Bianca's basement experience.) Panel 1: A shot of a bowl of rice on the dirty cold basement floor. Panel 2: A shot of Little Boy Daniel curled up in a dark corner. He's naked. The shadows cover him like a blanket. Panel 3: A long full-bodied shot of 10yr old Bianca kneeling in the basement's hidden floor hole, looking blankly into space. She covers her naked body with a ragged, dirty blanket to prevent herself from freezing. Her face is completely filthy and her hair is frizzy from being unwashed. The main point of the panel is to show that she is chained to the wall by a dog collar around her throat. The chain is long enough for her to walk around, but not long enough to reach the basement door. Panel 4: Quick Shot of Bianca grabbing at the bloody dog collar around her throat. (Back to Normal) Pg3 Panel 1: A profile facial shot of Mee smiling wickedly. She in complete ecstasy, blushing. Her hairs are at end. Mee: Oh yeah…That’s what dreams are really made of… Panel 2: A side shot of Mee menacingly crouching over the sleeping Bianca, holding out her hands. A weird mist is drifting from her hands to Bianca's head. Daniel is standing near, crossing his arms impatiently. Daniel: (WorBalloon1) I wanna kill her now, Mee. Let me end her right here! Mee: (WB2) Not now…I’m feeding. Daniel: (WB3) But you promised! You promised I could get my revenge! Mee: (WB4) Must you deceased be so impatient!? Panel 3: A shot of Mee continuing to hover over Bianca’s body, only gesturing like a Game Show Gal waving her hands over a grand prize. Mee: (WB1) Would it be so fun to murder the drugged up nymphet in her most prone state? (WB2) Believe me, it would be more satisfying to play some mind games with her first. Daniel: (WB3) I guess…But I don’t want to just watch you eat… Panel 4: A shot of Mee pulling Daniel through the Mini mart back wall. Mee: (WB1) Okay then, let’s go in and have some more fun in the store. Let your ‘friend’ snooze off her high. Daniel: (WB2) Then I get my revenge? Mee: (WB3) (SIGH) Panel 5: A quick shot of Daniel looking back, his head almost phased through the wall. He looks really pissed. Pg4 Panel 1: A quick ‘mouth’ shot of Jenny, blowing cigarette smoke while singing a verse from the song ‘Saddle Up A Buzz Buzz’ by The Cramps* Jenny: (WB1) Call’n all KNIF’s on a collision course, don’t let it bug ya if you ain’t got no horse…(WB2) Whoa! * Note: We’ll ask their permission if we can use these song lyrics, If we can’t, I’ll use the lyrics from my song 'Someone less than myself'. -VJ Panel 2: A full-bodied shot of Jenny in front of the mart, smoking a cigarette. She is leaning next to the store entrance, which has a sign on it reading “We’re Closed. Go Home.” She looking out in a menacing, yet innocent way. Around her neck is some unusually large stereo headphones, connected to a CD player fanny pack on her belt. The whole scene screams of an innocent coolness. Jenny: Saddle Up a Buzz Buzz…Saddle up a Buzz Buzz… Panel 3: A side shot of Jenny flicking the cigarette, as she stares over at the corner of the store. Jenny: ? Panel 4: A long shot of Jenny’s shadow looming over Bianca’s body, who is starting to wake up. Jenny: (WB1) Hey kid, you can’t sleep there! Go find a dumpster or some'n! Bianca: (WB2) Hmm? Pg5 Panel 1: A great shot of Jenny slightly kneeling over Bianca, resting her hands against her knees. Bianca looks up at Jenny, still sleepy headed. Jenny has a concerned look on her face. Jenny: (WB1) You a drug addict? My daddy'll come out and kick your ass off if you are! Bianca: (WB2) Drugs are bad…The cartoons say so… Panel 2: A shot of Bianca kneeling off the ground, brushing her right hand through her hair. Bianca (thinking): The pill Donna gave me…Sleepy still… Panel 3: A shot of Jenny sticking her face in Bianca’s, looking a little worried. Her head is cocked to the left. Jenny: Man, you look really blown…C'mon. Panel 4: A slightly comical shot of Jenny pulling Bianca’s left hand, trying to get her to get up. Bianca is resisting. Bianca: (WB1) W…What are you doing!? Jenny: (WB2) Hey, I’m not gonna hurtcha! Bianca: (WB3) You’re a stranger, not supposed to talk to strangers! Jenny: (WB4) My name’s Jennifer Ling Hiung. You can call me Jenny if you want. Does that help? Pg6 Panel 1: An action shot of Bianca swatting Jenny away while screaming. Bianca: (WB1) Leg-go of me! (WB2) Stop it! (WB3) Leave me alone! Panel 2: A shot of Jenny sitting on the ground, covering the side of her face. She’s angry and teary eyed. Jenny: (WB1) Hey! I’m just trying to help! (WB2) Forget you then, crackhead bitch! Panel 3: A shot of Bianca holding her mouth fearfully. Bianca: (Gasp) Panel 4: A shot of Bianca kneeling forward, reaching out affectionately to help Jenny up. Jenny angrily looks away, still holding her face. Bianca: (WB1) I…I’m sorry…I didn’t mean… Jenny: (WB2) Why the Hell are you so out of sorts? What armpit did you fall from anyway? Bianca: (WB3) My name is Bianca Santiago…I ran away from weirdoes who used to be my friends. Made me take drugs… Panel 5: A shot of Jenny rubbing her face painfully, yet almost excitedly over what Bianca said. . Jenny: (WB1) No shit!? Sounds like you’re night’s been screwed. (WB2) The store's closing up, but I think my daddy can help you set yourself strait. Pg7 Panel 1: A shot of Jenny noticing Bianca’s bandaged left arm. The bandage is filthy and starting to bleed again, really bad. Jenny: (WB1) Oh wow, you’re bleeding! Bianca: (WB2) …Hurts. Jenny: (WB1) Don't worry, we got a first-aid kit inside. Panel 2: A profile shot of Jenny holding onto Bianca’s right hand, leading her to the storefront. Bianca holds onto her face with her left in exhaustion. Jenny: (WB1) You're lucky I'm here to help you. There's ghosts and monsters all over the place in this town you know... Bianca: (WB2) What are you saying? Ghosts -n- monsters aren’t real… Panel 3: A frontal shot of the two of them entering the automatic doors of the grocery store. It’s very dark. Jenny: Daddy? Daddy, where’d you go? Panel 4: A shot of Bianca noticing the first aid kit, which is secured against a wall in the back of the grocery. Next to it is a mirror. Jenny is behind her, pointing a thumb over her shoulder. Jenny: (WB1) Get yourself fixed up while I go look for my daddy in the backroom. (WB2) And if you try to steal anything, it's your ass! Panel 5: A quick side shot of Bianca pulling gauze from the first aid kit. Pg8 Panel 1: A side shot of Bianca finishing wrapping new bandages over her wound. It doesn’t look very good, but she did her best. The First-Aid kit is in shambles, down to the small bottle of alcohol tipped over and spilling. Panel 2: A great frontal shot of Bianca in the mirror, looking at her bandage, but not looking into the mirror directly. Silhouetted behind her is Spirit Daniel, looking at her fiercely. He purposely changed his form to look like he did as a child so she would recognize him Panel 3: A side shot of Bianca, as she actually sees him. Her eyes widen in shock.. Panel 4: A shot of Daniel grasping onto Bianca’s throat from behind, slamming her against the mirror face first, breaking it. Daniel: (WB1) You killed me, and you got away with it! (WB2) Now it’s my time to get away with killing you… Bianca: ! Pg9 Panel 1: A shot of Jenny entering the backroom, looking about. She doesn’t notice the sound the braking mirror made in the background. Everything is dark. Jenny: Daddy? Are ya back here? Panel 2: A quick shot of Mee’s hand pulling down on a light chain, turning on the light in the backroom. Panel 3: A horrific, near half page shot of the backroom. To the left of the panel, hung from the piping above is Mr. Hiung, with a noose tightly around his throat. He’s wearing no shirt, as a certain ghost decided to impale several kitchen blades into his chest. To the right is the new female store clerk, whom has been nailed against a wall in an unflattering sexual position. In the middle of this mess is Mee, who holds her arms out wide presenting the scene. In the foreground is Jenny, completely shocked. Panel 4: An action shot of Mee hovering menacingly over Jenny, who cowers in fear. Pg10 Panel 1: A cinematic shot of Daniel’s arms elongating, dragging Bianca’s face along the wall. Cut from the broken mirror, she leaves a blood streak on the wall. Daniel: We were supposed to survive together in that basement and you killed me! That wasn’t right! Panel 2: A shot of Bianca’s face banging against the ceiling. Panel 3: A facial shot of Daniel smiling in relief that he’s getting his revenge. Daniel: Die now, so we can go to Hell together… Panel 4: A shot of Princess, Donna and Richie walking through the automatic doorways of the store, immediately seeing what is going on inside. Donna: Oh shit! Pg11 Panel 1: A shot of Daniel turning his head backward ‘Exorcist’ style to see them, being distracted. The ghostly image of his little kid face still looks up at Bianca, only faded. Kinds like he has two heads, one turned around and one still looking up. Daniel: (WB1) She has to die now, so leave me alone! (WB2) There’s nothing you can do to me anyway, I know so! Panel 2: A shot of Princess reaching into his jacket inner pocket. He’s in a rage. Panel 3: A facial shot of Princess flashing a large iron pair of shears in Daniel’s direction, which glows a light blue aura. His whole body is surrounded by the same blue light aura coming from the shears. Panel 4: A quick facial shot of Daniel face as he is starting to disappear, screaming angrily. Looks kind of like a strong wind blowing through mist. Daniel: No! She has to die! She has to- Panel 5: A quick shot of his hands fading, letting go of Bianca’s throat. Pg12 Panel 1: An action shot of Princess running through Daniel to catch Bianca falling, being careful not cut her with the shears. Daniel dissipates like fog upon the contact, some of which is floating into the shears. Panel 2: A frontal shot of Princess kneeling down cradling Bianca, as Donna and Richie stand at his sides. Richie: (WB1) She okay? Princess: (WB2) I don't know. Her face is cut up pretty bad. (WB3) Check the store, see if Jenny and her father is okay. Richie: (WB4) Word... Panel 3: A shot of Bianca fainting in Princess's arms. Bianca: Ghosts aren’t real…Daniel’s…dead… Panel 4: A shot of Princess swerving his head, reacting to Richie screaming. Richie: Holy fuck! Princess: What's wrong Richie!? What did you find!? Pg13 Panel 1: An upper bodied shot of Donna carrying little Jenny in her arms from the back room, passing her brother. Richie is looking into the room, freaking out. Richie: (WB1) They took out old man Hiung and the clerk! They’re all sliced up! Donna: (WB2) Found the kid on the floor near their bodies. Looks like she fell and bumped her head. (WB3) Thought I saw a mare flying into the back wall too. Panel 2: A shot of Princess and Donna facing each other, with Richie in the background between them. Bianca and Jenny seemingly are in the same sleeping position. Richie looks shaken up. Richie: (WB1) ... Princess: (WB2) First they took out momma, and now this. They d to take us apart piece by piece. Donna: (WB3) Yo, we gotta bounce...If 5-O catches us here, ain't no way we can prove we didn't do this. Panel 3: A shot of Princess and Donna standing out front of the store, as Richie pulls down the front shutter over the automatic doors. Jenny looks angelic in Donna's arms, while Bianca is a limp mess in Princess's arms. Princess: (WB1) The way the state troopers work around here, they won’t find the bodies 'till the morning. If we're lucky. (WB2) After we take care of this, we're gonna have to leave town. Donna: (WB2) I don't wanna leave town over this shit! Where we gonna go!? Princess: (WB3): We'll figure it all out, so calm down. We gotta focus on the situation at hand before looking ahead anyway. Panel 4: A shot of Richie standing next to Princess, looking down in sadness. He is showing some actual emotion other than his ‘Gangsta face’. Princess looks over at him affectionately. Richie: (WB1) Yo, I ain't prepared for this kind of shit...I don't wanna die over this, Princess. I'm...I'm so fuck'n scared right now... Pg14 Panel 1: A shot of Princess suddenly reaching over, kissing Richie on the cheek. Panel 2: An upper bodied shot of Richie looking a little flushed, yet still with a sad look on his face. Princess is in the opposite of the panel, looking at Richie affectionately. Donna stands near them, looking pissed. Princess: (WB1) Shut up and stay gangster, ‘aw-ight’? (WB2) Believe me, I won’t let anything happen to anyone here, you especially. Donna: (WB3) Damn, we ain't got time gay ass shit! Get in the damn car! Panel 3: As the group get into Donna’s ‘chariot’, the perspective mainly focuses in on a car that just pulls in from across the street. Panel 4: A shot of the person driving that car. It’s Olando, who has been following Donna since she took Bianca from the hospital. He’s tilting his head and looking on with narrow eyes, both pissed and puzzled. Olando: Found you... Pg15 (From this point, the rest of thee comic will take place at the Valen's house. -VJ) Panel 1: A grand shot of Richie and Donna’s nice little home at the edge of town. It lies right next to the charred remains of Princess’s home. Panel 2: A quick panel of Bianca’s sleeping face. She looks like she’s having another nightmare. Panel 3: A half bodied shot of Bianca waking up from her current nightmare. She’s sleeping on a couch in the living room. All her facial wounds have been tended to with cartoon bandages. Bianca: Daniel! Pg16 Panel 1: A near half-page shot of Bianca looking over from the couch at everyone in the very large living room. Donna is lying back in a lounge chair resting, while Richie is sitting in front of the living room TV flipping channels. Jenny is sleeping with a blanket over her in a couch opposite Bianca. Princess is looking out a window in the background behind it. The front door is to Princess’s left. The room looks a little barren. Bianca: (WB1) Where…? Donna: (WB2) We at the main crib. All our 'operations' take place up in here. Me and Richie hustle down in the basement to make the cash we liv’n on. Princess: (WB3) ... Panel 2: A side shot of Princess looking out of his window. He’s holding the Mare Hunter Shears. Tears are in his eyes… Princess: (WB1) Listen, we don’t really have a lot of time. (WB2) You gotta tell us why this ghost named Daniel wants to kill you. Please. Panel 3: A shot of Bianca looking frustrated and teary eyed. Bianca: (WB1) I don’t know nothin’… I told you I don’t believe in monsters and ghosts…(WB2) Stop confusing me and tell me what's really going on! Panel 4: A shot of Richie turning off the TV, looking over at Bianca. Princess is walking off in the background. Richie: (WB1) What's going on is we wanna stop the mares from mess'n wit us humans. (WB2) Some of ‘em has been doing some freaky ass Freddy-style shit, and there ain't barely nobody out there who knows about 'em. Pg17 Panel 1: A shot of Donna leaning forward in the lounger, resting her elbows on her knees and her head on her hands. Donna: (WB1) Hey, I know how you feel listening to this crazy ass bullshit. I didn’t believe it either 'till Princess and his moms showed us how to see the mares. (WB2) Even Jenny over can see ghosts and mares, real easy too. Probably why she got roughed up... Panel 2: A shot of the sleeping Jenny on the other couch, as Princess passes by in front of her. Princess Caption: (WB1) My momma Patsy learned about mares from my grandmother, who was supposedly a really powerful psychic back in the day. ‘Dream Eaters’ is what she used to call them. (WB2) While she really didn't know much about them, it was enough for us to learn to see their world. What we really wanted to learn is if there was a way we could stop them... Panel 3: A shot of Princess pulling a very old journal-type book from a desk in a corner of the room. Princess: (WB1) That info was lost to us until a mysterious package came for my momma a few days ago...(WB2) It was left on the doorstep without a return address or anything. The package came with these shears, and an old journal. Panel 4: A shot of Princess holding up the journal. On the cover, it reads: Mares and their Indentured Servants Princess: (WB1) From what's written in the journal, some Russian priest named Lumen Khail back in the 40's discovered what the mares were and spent his entire life learning all about them. (WB2) Just before he died, Khail eventually found a way to kill them, as well as create weapons that can be used to stop the evils they inflict on humanity. Pg18 Panel 1: A side shot of Princess handing the shears to Bianca, as he holds onto the journal close. Princess: (WB1) While it doesn't say how he did it, Khail infused 6 shears with the power to steal the spiritual energy of ghosts, trapping them in the hollows inside the iron. (WB2) That's how I was able to save you earlier from Daniel's ghost, I forced him into the shears. The ghost of my mother is also in here... Bianca: (WB3) I...This is crazy...You people are insane! Panel 2: A shot of a wide eyed Bianca as she takes a hold of the shears. The outlines of her body are glowing ever so slightly. Princess: (WB1) The shears can also be used to prove to you that mares are real. (WB2) It's gonna channel the combined energy of all the ghosts inside it to give you the ability to see into their reality. Considering the horrible life you've lived up until now, you should have the right mental frequency to see them. Bianca: (WB3) I'm...glowing? Panel 3: A shot from Bianca’s perspective, as she looks at everyone in the room. There are slight foggy shadows that have materialized around the room. Panel 4: A quick shot of Bianca's eyes widening in horror. Panel 5: Same as Panel 3, only all of a sudden, she sees almost a dozen Mares floating about in the room. Many of them are laughing and giggling in her direction. Since this is kind of a quick glance, all the mares are a bit shadowy. Bianca Caption: No... Pg19 Panel 1: A sudden shot of Bianca running toward the front door, still gripping the shears. Princess is pushed to one side. Dona and Richie are getting up to also go after Bianca. Mares: (WB1) Giggle…hahahaha… Princess: (WB2) Wait! Donna: (WB3) Hey-yo, get your ass back here! Bitch just loves to run away, don't she?: Bianca: (WB4) No! The voices...The voices are back...Gotta go away, gotta hide, gotta get away from here…Don't wanna hear- Panel 2: A frontal half-bodied shot of Bianca standing stiff in the doorway. She’s shivering in fear, as Olando’s shadow is looming over her. Bianca: -the voices. Panel 3: A shot of Donna, Princess and Richie standing in the doorway, as Orlando's hand pulls Bianca out of it. Panel 4: Same shot as above, only everyone is jerking backward on sight of Olando’s gun off panel. Richie: The f- Pg20 Panel 1: A full bodied shot of Olando holding Bianca close to him, while he points his gun forward. It’s the gun Bianca shot herself with. He looks pissed off beyond belief, while Bianca just rests in his arms submissively. Olando: She’s mine, you freaks! She’s mine! Bianca: The…the voices… Panel 2: A shot of Richie and Donna instinctively pulling out their Glock 8mm pistols from their pant pockets. Princess stand behind them, holding up his hands. Donna: Child molest’n mothafucka! The fuck you do’n here?! Richie: Damn it! Panel 3: A quick shot of Bianca huddling closer to her father, acting as if she’s feeling safer in his arms. She looks so sad. Olando: Don't say shit to me! My little girl was normal 'till YOUR parents turned her into this fuck’n fruit! Panel 4: A side shot of Donna pointing her gun at Olando ‘Gangsta style’. Olando stands firm, still pointing his own gun forward. Olando: (WB1) Now we gonna do it like this...You turn around and walk back in dat fuck'n house and don't let me ever see you again. I’m taking my little girl out of here. Donna: (WB2) So you can take her back to the Bronx and fuck her some more times!? Fuck you! Olando: (WB3) Fuck me!? How ‘bout I kill you and your two faggot friends!? How’s that for fuck me!?! Pg21 Panel 1: A shot of Bianca holding onto her 'papi', her wide eyes in total shock. She grips the shears tightly. Bianca: Papi, I can hear the voices again…Make them stop? Olando: What are you talking about, mami? It’s okay, your Papi’s gonna take you out of here. Panel 2: A quick shot of Olando grabbing onto the shears. A blue spark flashes from his touch. Olando: What the Hell are those, scissors? Put that down, I don't want you to cut yourself. Panel 3: A great near half-page shot of Olando in absolute shock as it seems there are dozens of mares all around him, looking on and laughing their asses off. Bianca collapses to his feet. Olando: What the fuck is all this!? Panel 4: A quick shot of Princess grabbing the gun from Olando’s hand. Princess: I got the gun! Panel 5: An action shot of Donna swinging her gun violently. Donna: I got his ass! Panel 6: An action shot of Donna’s gun crushing into Olando’s face, breaking his nose. Crunch. Pg22 Panel 1: A cinematic shot of everyone on the front porch. Donna and Richie has instinctively pointed their guns on Olando, who lies on his back, knocked out. Princess is bending down to check on Bianca, who is kneeling, grasping onto the shears like life itself. Donna: (WB1) Tell me I can shoot his ass, PLEASE tell me I can! Richie: (WB2) Chill, you knocked his ass out! Panel 2: A shot of Princess crouching to look at Bianca, who has her face down while crying. He sets Bianca’s silenced gun at the ground beside him. Princess: (WB1) Hey…It’s alright. You saw the Mares, right, you see that they're real. (WB2) Now you know we're telling the truth.... Bianca: (WB3) The voices… Panel 3: A shot of Bianca looking up at Princess, a sick smile etched across it. Her bandages are hanging off, some of her facial cuts bleeding again. Very dark and sickly image. Bianca: I’m ready to tattle tale on all the bad little things I did to Daniel... Panel 4: A shot of Princess getting up, startled at what Bianca just said. In the background, Richie and Donna are dragging Olando in the house by his feet. Princess: (WB1) … Donna: (WB2) Yo P, we’re gonna tie up this mutha up in the kitchen. Let's be outta sight. Princess: (WB3) Yeah…Okay. Pg23 Panel 1: A profile shot of Princess helping Bianca walk through the front door, who still holds onto the shears, and still has that sick smile on her face. Some mares are here and there, looking on. Bianca: (WB1) Poor Daniel…Poor poor Daniel… Princess: (WB2) Shh, let’s get inside and get you calmed down. Then you can tell us all about it. Panel 2: Similar as the last panel, only much farther away. It’s Mee, who is materializing on the porch swing. Panel 3: A shot of Mee laying down on the porch swing, looking on with determination. Her tail wags happily though. She is caressing the head of an ‘ogre’ mare lying under the swing. Mee: (WB1) Damn that little idiot…(WB2) She's going to blab everything and then my fun will have to end sooner than I wanted... Panel 4: A quick shot of Bianca’s silenced gun that was left on the porch floor. Mee: Hmmm… Panel 5: A quick shot of Mee peeking through the front door. In the extreme right is a close up of Jenny sleeping on the couch, looking innocent. Mee: Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm… Pg24 Final Page of Issue 2: Mee is resting her arms on the couch armrest, looking down at the sleeping Jenny. Mee has a ‘grinch’ smile on her face, only sicker. A light aura is being exchanged from her head to Jenny’s. . Bianca: (WB1) Hey kid. Wanna make your dreams come true? (WB2) Your ol’ granny Mee can make it happen, if you listen reeeaaallly carefully... End of Issue Two |